First of all it is great to see the backstory of the people crewing the ships you design come to live in these stories. It gives the ships also a sense of life that is not easily conveyed by technical schematics. It is also interesting to read the viewpoints from three different characters which, even though they serve the same nation, have an other personality and are different with their approaches and of the situation.
If there is a nitpick then it would be how you will make combine other chapters in this story. With that I mean chapters discriptions, paragraphs and eventually the additions of other characters (enemies?) and action scenery.
All in all I am looking forward what you will do so get to it !